Pokeumans Chapter 1

Pokeumans Chapter 1

Cool!
Hmm... Seems like a legit story, but it felt somewhat jagged with the paragraph assembly. The angle of Forza in the present felt too brief. (In my opinion.) You wouldn't really need to state if a chapter is in a POV if written well enough. And again, you have an interesting story.
skydancer121
skydancer121
Has anyone else realized Forza got completely dressed before she finally noticed her hair?
Good to see you begin! I'm still working on preparation for mine, it's gonna be crazy having three stories going on all at once lol
skydancer121
skydancer121
I'm working on multiple stories at once too dude. Don't worry, I think it's a writer thing. I hope it's healthy.
It's a good start! Keep it up!
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