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Elementary Beginnings Part: 1

"Ruin???", a voice called from a small house.It was a woman,dressed in a simple garb,with a patch here and there. " (Now where is that boy now? I hope he's alright)",she thought. Suddenly,a boy dragging some chopped wood came walking back to her. "Sorry about that,mother.I brought the wood back for our dinner", he said,dropping the load. " Well,aren't you the sweetest thing? Thank you,Ruin.If only your father was this enthusiastic as you...",she replied,as the two walked inside.

The woman's name is Nihilia,and the young man following her is named Ruin.They may look like everyday people,but they're actually Null Elementals,meaning they have little to no power. Unlike them,they're are other Elementals with a vast array of powers.Null Elemtals have a little,but they do not have enough to do much.They are considered to be outcasts,and other Elementals often look down on them.However,Nihilia always tries to keep her son,Ruin,positive despite their position.

"Ugh,you done wasting your time out there,boy?", a man asked,slumped on a chair. " Corc,you should be ashamed.At least your son is doing more than you are",Nihilia replied in a scolding tone. "Bah...Why even try? Without other Elementals close by,our resources are either junk,or hard to find", he snorted.Ruin looked at his father with a scowl. " What? You think I'm wrong? HUH!?",he asked,grabbing his son's shirt collar. "That's enough,Corc!", Nihilia exclaimed,stepping in front of her son.She was gentle by nature,but even gentle creatures lash out at times.Corc backed down,and went back to his chair.

Later that night,Ruin looked up at the sky,lost in thought. " You know? There are many Elementals out there,each with their own power:Fire,Water,Earth,Lightning,Wind,Light,Dark,and Oblivion...",Nihilia said,as she sat by him. "Mom...Is it possible if those Elementals came here...would our village be more abundant?", he asked.She looked into the sky. " I believe so.I always believe that they will have pity on us,and come to our aid",she said softly.Ruin looked at his mother.She always seemed to have a calming aura about her that made him feel better (Unlike his dad). "(Other Elementals...Can they be our only hope)"? ~Part 1 End

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If only 3DSpedia coulda let me in back in August! I'd have found this far sooner if only!

As expected, you have yourself the plot, premise and design of a working Anime.
One of the only issues I have is when Nihilia said, "If only your father was this enthusiastic as you." Maybe something more like, "if only your father could be as enthusiastic..." or "if only your father was enthusiastic like you."
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I don't really know how to put words, that has always been a thing for me. ^^" But I'll try to in the future!
I love the storyline <3

One tip tho, putting a space after you put a comma.
Like this, hi o/
Not like this,hi o/
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Oh right, people have told me to start doing that later on. XD And thank you! I didn't think anyone was gonna read this, besides Sofa and Toxic. :p Glad you're enjoying it so far!
I love the plot ^^
it could be longer though c:
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Thanks! I'll try to,but my folks keep finding something for us to do in the day,so I don't really have time.But I'll do my best! :)
Yep, I think you should go for more new paragraphs when someone is speaking, taking your time on it would make it a lot more presentable.

But it's a good start :)
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Thanks a lot for the comments! I really want to make this thing good! Also,thanks for the tip! :p
Mom dies.


Calling it
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D: Oh,that's so sad! ;-; I dun't want her to die!
A few spelling errors, a few gramatical errors, kinda short...
But I love it! It's a great start, and I can't wait to read the rest!
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Darn these stupid thumbs! >.< I'll have to try not to post so fast next time. ;-; But thanks! I'll do better!
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