Makoto's Mansion: Prolouge

Makoto's Mansion: Prolouge

Makoto's Mansion
Prologue

October 19th, 2007

*thunder booming* *lightning strike*
It was a rather rainy night, water cascading along the stairs of Daisouji Mansion, the fanciest mansion in all of Japan. No one, in all of Japan, was ever brave enough, or stupid enough, to even step foot on the stairs, except for one girl: Makoto Kinahara. Once she'd arrived at the top of the fleet of staircases, she'd found that the double doors had already been open, as if someone had been waiting for her this whole time. Makoto had been there on an investigation for a new scoop for the local news. Makoto had worked her way through the maze-like mansion to stumble upon a trap door, so she entered. She had made it all the way down the basement and found these cards on a coffee table:
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All the cards had been flipped over except for the ace, which had a drop of blood in the top left corner of the card. As soon , as Makoto touched the ace on the card, Makoto started hearing high-pitched sounds coming closer and closer, and she ran. Only a few feet away from the doors, they slam shut, and Makoto felt an ice cold chill run up and down her spine. Makoto had turned around, and saw blood thirsty creatures of all sizes, ready to devour her. Her right eye was the only trace of her left. Makoto's spirit, angry with the mansion, decided to stay dormant until another foolish person decided to visit, ready to take their life...

End

Wow, this was very well put together, if I do say so myself. I literally came up with all of this off the top of my head. I'll leave it up to the readers to decide though.(it's so awesome, right?) Anyway, thanks you for reading.

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interesting (it was awesome) can't wait to read chapter 1!!!
Frisk
Frisk
I've already got to chapter 2, and chapter 3 should be released today! Give it a read!
Now next feom Toxic Manor we have this mansion!

Ill wait for the first chap :)

Also is that image by any chance from Apollo Justice ace attorney?
Frisk
Frisk
I don't know... i'll have to look into it.
It's good \o/ A more interactive way of telling a story, eh?

The end could have done with being slightly slower - only slightly - and 'a while later' or something would have made the after-devouring sentence easier to get. Mailto could have done with some more explanation.

I sound nitpicky. It's a good start \o
Frisk
Frisk
Thank you so much! And it's "Makoto", not Malitio. There was kind of a typo on the name
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