That's a really, really skimpy review - more of a gameplay summary than a review. No real mention of the game's mechanics or aesthetics .-. Also, one of those 'I' reviews. While I enjoy them usually, they always come off as unprofessional - not a bad thing, but they would be disregarded if one ever had to sift for proper reviews. I suggest reading some established critics' reviews to get a general idea of how to write good reviews. Alex Navarro, formerly of GameSpot, is one I'd recommend easily.
You can PM me if you want any more advice \: D/
5 stars to encourage you and because you gotta start somewhere :3