Challenge Tiny Story challenge

[PersonSP]

I don't write very often but pretty much all of my family members are writers. I also read a lot of books. I made my story have an H. P. Lovecraft sort of tone to it. That dude can seriously write horror!

Well let's hear it then! Please post it.

sent them!

Step aside! Let the pro handle this!

Story landing in 3, 2, 1

We were coming back from school and we decided to take a shortcut through the forest so we could get home quicker, all of them were my friends since since first grade, except for my sister, for obvious reasons. My sister asked me if we were there yet and I said "not yet, just a little further" I lied, we were lost in the woods with no way out when I heard a weird noise, " What is this noise?" asked Jack, the boy in the brown coat with a scarf. "Big bro, I'm scared!" said my sister, "It's okay Annie, I'm here" I responded, a strange shadow appeared in the a distance, "Huh? What was that" asked Sarah, the girl in the red jacket."We have to get to my home quickly" I thought, "Are we lost?" said Lisa, the girl with twin ponytails, "No, we're fine" I said "I have to find a way out!" I thought. We all stopped, a huge shadow was right next to us, Annie started crying and hugged her bunny. I saw the figure's bright red eyes, and I knew it was the end...

Placing yourself deep down in the forest of horrors... That's quite confronting.

you forgot "Its snowing on mount fuji"

Good point! But it'd be kinda cheating if I revised it as per your suggestion @.@

Nah, revising is fine. As long as don't change your entry completely. Sometimes a small change can do a lot.


Only 4 days to go! Everyone who considers entering please enter! (Pretty please, it's more fun if there are more entries) Currently I have 4 entries. If we somehow get to 10 entries before the end date I'll make this a regular thing. I already know something for the next challenge. Now a bit of cheating. @Spinnerweb / @Cheshire_Cat03 / @Jeff The Killer would you like to enter? I tagged you all because I know you can write.

 

[18]

Now a bit of cheating. @Spinnerweb / @Cheshire_Cat03 / @Jeff The Killer would you like to enter? I tagged you all because I know you can write.

I love the idea of this contest and mean to enter a story I hope I'll be able to finish one I'm pleased with in time.

 

[PersonSP]

I love the idea of this contest and mean to enter a story I hope I'll be able to finish one I'm pleased with in time.

Yay! Great! I'm really looking forward to reading your story.

 

[Jeff The Killer]

Yeah this sounds like fun! I sent the pc and will be posting the story soon, thanks for inviting me to this

 

[PersonSP]

Yeah this sounds like fun! I sent the pc and will be posting the story soon, thanks for inviting me to this

You're welcome! I'm looking forward to reading your story (you're the king of horror around here so this should be the perfect challenge for you)

 

[Kiki]

I was thinking about joining this but, unfortunately, word limits and I do not get along well. I write too much. Always have. It's really rather bad. I wouldn't be able to abide by the two paragraph limit, I'm afraid. So! I will not be joining this but thank you so much for considering me and the compliment about my writing.

Best of luck to everyone who enters!

 

[Tho]

I won't be joining this one as i don't have any good ideas to make a story at the moment, but if you make this a regular thing, I'll join next time for sure!

 

[PersonSP]

I was thinking about joining this but, unfortunately, word limits and I do not get along well. I write too much. Always have. It's really rather bad. I wouldn't be able to abide by the two paragraph limit, I'm afraid. So! I will not be joining this but thank you so much for considering me and the compliment about my writing.

Best of luck to everyone who enters!

Awww... Well, I know the problem, thanks for considering.

I won't be joining this one as i don't have any good ideas to make a story at the moment, but if you make this a regular thing, I'll join next time for sure!

Good to know. :3

 

[PersonSP]

Only 2 days to go! Everybody join and post! Common!

 

[PersonSP]

Tomorrow is the last day! Be quick!

 

[Rsngamer]

I'm gonna tweak a few things, maybe make it more atmospheric

Did 4B post his story?

 

[PersonSP]

Yes he did. Nice nickname though.

 

[PersonSP]

Entries are now closed.

These are the entries of this Tiny Story Challenge:

Somewhere
in melting Kilimanjaro
Eerie thing
Five children
Not the forest

Four friends were driven to a home in the forest by their parents for the weekend; Aerial, with her favorite stuffed bunny, Tim, the youngest boy of the group, Tiz, the oldest boy in group, Anges, the youngest girl with twin ponytails. Aerial had asked her mom if she and her friends could go outside to play in the woods, to which she and the other parents had agree. However, they were warned to not stay deep into the forest. The gang had a fun time playing tag near the house, that was until Anges had an idea to hide deep in the woods so she wouldn't be found. This this not stop her from being found. "What are you doing, Anges? Where not supposed to be here." exclaimed Tiz. The gang tried to see where the house was, but the fog was too deep. They were met by a girl in a red hood, who said she lives in this forest with her family for years now and would the gang find their way back, but only after they come with her to see a big rock she enjoyed climbing as a kid. The gang agreed, seeing as they have no other choice. The girl stayed back, looking behind her almost every second with a stern look on her face, which made Tiz suspicious of her. "We're here," said the girl. "But I don't see anything," Tim said. The thick fog was clearing, allowing the gang to see what was in the distance. Unfortunately, this would be the last thing they would see.

And it wasn't a rock.

Lol, the example is more than two paragraphs long. I suppose I'll give it a go.

There are evil things in this world but there is no other equal in such devilry and malcontent as the dreaded Lachrymose Forest. Tales of the forests infamy span as far back as the very beginnings of human civilization. It was only until recently in our modern age when the tales had begun to fade into mystery and obsurity. That is until a group of children rekindled the stories and I wish with all my heart that it had not. For very few now can sleep without the constant terror that that forest inflicts upon our deepest dreams.
. It all began on one foggy autumn day of October. Children were at play in the various piles of freshly fallen dead leaves and the brown-orange forests of the local country side. It was then that 5 children would set foot in that dreaded forest for a bit of fun and dare. One of the children had heard echoes of the forests tale in old tomes of a long forgotten time. In a rush of youth and stupidity the group of children ventured into the forest. It wasn't long until they began to hear whisperings and seeing shadows. Voices which goaded the children to a long awaited trap. The youngest was the first to go missing. This was followed by every other child except for the oldest of the five. In desperation the remaining child tried to escape the forest but to no avail. He had gone to far. Every step now would only drive him deeper into treachery and darkness. It became apparent to the boy that among the trees dead children were draped along the branches of the trees. Children from an ancient times and from times past ever since. It was then when he saw it. The harbinger of all terror and sorrow that the forest had housed. It was what the ancients had labeled Mori. For it was death that was staring at the child. It stood expressionless yet full of malice and anger. 20 feet high with tendrils for arms and black as the void. Death came swift for the boy and the monster had claimed yet another victim.

sent them!

Step aside! Let the pro handle this!

Story landing in 3, 2, 1

We were coming back from school and we decided to take a shortcut through the forest so we could get home quicker,the wind was blowing and it was cold, my childhood friends and my sister were the ones with me. My sister asked me if we were there yet and I said "not yet, just a little further" I lied, we were lost in the woods with no way out when I heard a weird noise, " What is this noise?" asked Jack, the boy in the brown coat with a scarf. "Big bro, I'm scared!" said my sister,hugging her plush bunny. "It's okay Annie, I'm here" I responded, a strange shadow appeared in the a distance, "Huh? What was that" asked Sarah, the girl in the red jacket."We have to get to my home quickly" I thought, "Are we lost?" said Lisa, the girl with twin ponytails, "No, we're fine" I said "I have to find a way out!" I thought. We all stopped, a huge shadow was right next to us, Annie started crying and hugged her bunny harder. I saw the figure's bright red eyes, and I knew it was the end...

Honourable third place (without a price, but with honour ) goes to... @dwikrid Your story was very tiny (and also a haiku) and very expressive. Wel done!
Second place was won by... @Elchronic Maelstrom Congratulations! I like the fairytail style you used!
And first place goes to... @BetterBushyBurmyBureau Winner!! You've got a very nice writing style. Congratulations!

Prices will be send out soon (when my wifi gets functional)

Unfortunately, due to a lack of entries (only 4) this will not become a regular thing. (If for the next contest we would again have 4 plus @Spinnerweb @Tho and @Jeff The Killer is might work, but after seeing the pilot I don't think that will happen) Well, anyway, I had fun, I hope you had fun reading/writing too!

 

[Tho]

Is it just me or did you just post the same thing twice? @PersonSP

 

[DeathDragon]

This is a tale of a forest. A forest, in which in there was said to be a light. A black light. The forest had no name. It had no placement on any map. For when one entered the forest, they would never come back. The dead ground sunk beneath their feet as four children walked through the dense forest. With no idea of how to return home, the children continued on along the one path in the trees. The one path they thought would guide them out of this eerie place. Whilst walking, they met a girl. A solitary girl in the middle of the deep forest, with a red hood. She kindly offered to lead them out of the forest, to their relieved feelings, believing they had finally got the chance to escape the forest. The girl guided them along, but their path didn't divert; they continued to walk, on the path, in the dead of night.

It seemed to them like they had been walking for an eternity. The trees were endless, and it was impossible to see far in the darkness. Looking up only granted them a view of the black sky being blocked by dark leaves on trees. The girl in the red hood stayed at the rear as the children grew tired, hungry and thirsty. Despite this, they didn't stop. In their fear and desperation, the children could not take a break, for it would only take longer for them to get home. Eventually, a light began to shine. A black light. A light shrouded with darkness. The children could only see this as their way out of the forest. They turned around to see the girl in the red hood, who simply looked back herself, giving no indication of what it was they were seeing. The children continued to walk, as the light at the end of the path grew closer. The trees began to grow less dense, and they saw an owl on the branch of a tree. A solitary owl, who did not hoot, who stood still as the children walked, on certain they were saved. But what they saw ahead was no longer a light. They turned around to see the girl in the red hood. She quietly muttered one word: 'Goodbye.' There was no light. There was no exit. There was no escape. The thing they stood before on that night, was the last thing those children ever saw.

EDIT: OH MAN I DIDN'T SEE IT HAD CLOSED

 

[Tho]

Do another challenge! I'm sure more people will enter!

 

[DeathDragon]

Yeah, please do another one, I didn't realise it was closed as I didn't see the second page xD

And I had a lot of fun writing mine, so I guess it wasn't all for nothing

 

[BetterBushyBurmyBureau]

Yay! *high fives all around!*

 

[PersonSP]

Is it just me or did you just post the same thing twice? @PersonSP

Terrible internet. Like really terrible.

This is a tale of a forest. A forest, in which in there was said to be a light. A black light. The forest had no name. It had no placement on any map. For when one entered the forest, they would never come back. The dead ground sunk beneath their feet as four children walked through the dense forest. With no idea of how to return home, the children continued on along the one path in the trees. The one path they thought would guide them out of this eerie place. Whilst walking, they met a girl. A solitary girl in the middle of the deep forest, with a red hood. She kindly offered to lead them out of the forest, to their relieved feelings, believing they had finally got the chance to escape the forest. The girl guided them along, but their path didn't divert; they continued to walk, on the path, in the dead of night.

It seemed to them like they had been walking for an eternity. The trees were endless, and it was impossible to see far in the darkness. Looking up only granted them a view of the black sky being blocked by dark leaves on trees. The girl in the red hood stayed at the rear as the children grew tired, hungry and thirsty. Despite this, they didn't stop. In their fear and desperation, the children could not take a break, for it would only take longer for them to get home. Eventually, a light began to shine. A black light. A light shrouded with darkness. The children could only see this as their way out of the forest. They turned around to see the girl in the red hood, who simply looked back herself, giving no indication of what it was they were seeing. The children continued to walk, as the light at the end of the path grew closer. The trees began to grow less dense, and they saw an owl on the branch of a tree. A solitary owl, who did not hoot, who stood still as the children walked, on certain they were saved. But what they saw ahead was no longer a light. They turned around to see the girl in the red hood. She quietly muttered one word: 'Goodbye.' There was no light. There was no exit. There was no escape. The thing they stood before on that night, was the last thing those children ever saw.

EDIT: OH MAN I DIDN'T SEE IT HAD CLOSED

That would have won you first place... I hope you will compete in the next challenge!

Do another challenge! I'm sure more people will enter!

Okay, due to popular demand, I'll give it another go! I'll post it today! i look forward to seeing you at the second challenge!

 

[Tho]

Terrible internet. Like really terrible.


That would have won you first place... I hope you will compete in the next challenge!

Okay, due to popular demand, I'll give it another go! I'll post it today! i look forward to seeing you at the second challenge!

I will do my best! Also, do something about that internet of yours!