The Capsule: A Giantess Samus Story

The Capsule: A Giantess Samus Story

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Doctor Strange
Good job.
KnighddDd
Hey! this was actually great. Aside some little problems with it, its good and your best story yet
Bobcam7!
Sans and Pokefreak pointed out the majority of the issues. Definitely a turn for the better.
Pookie
Everything is great about the story although it doesn't seem like it's finished. Great work.
TheYESDragon
Not that bad? I mean, you used paragraphs, the story is somewhat coherat but this story deserves a "WAT". Making it longer to flesh out the details could help.
Gary Johnson
Wat did I just read. 4/5 for paragraphs
Slayerpon Tatsu
Decent story I guess. Just fix formatting and make the characters more dynamic. All the characters seem really dynamic and the story just feels rushed to the climax.
Con-0-Tron
um...what did i just read XD
Sans
I'll admit, it's a lot better. But there are questions that I have.

1. How come Samus crash lands convinently next to the castle?

2. How do Mario and Peach not know she crashed? Surely they had to know, rather than just answer the door.

3. She crashes near the mushroom kingdom. BUT SHE'S AT THE CASTLE! WHAT IS THIS LOGIC?????

4. Why is Samus such a douche to Mario?
Henry 25313
Henry 25313
I have answers to those questions.
1. Samus ran out of fuel, crashed near the Mushroom Kingdom, and went over to the castle(crashing far from the castle.)
2. They were in the castle doing whatever, which must have been louder than the noise from the crash(Remember that Samus crashed far from the castle.)
3. Samus goes over to the castle because she crashes far from it.
4. Mario laughs at Samus for expecting him to have a battery at the castle.
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Clap.
a proper, decent story at last. Can't find fault with this one.
Frisk
Pretty good
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